This is a wonderful story, dear. I usually avoid commenting as personal as this because there might be things we as outsiders never know but I think this story would affect anyone some way or another. Please take this critique from a story point of view, not as a judgement of any personal experience.
Okay, first of all, breaking it down:
There is quite some repetition in places but overall, this is a well worded and touching piece. The descriptions are really detailed and imagery is really strong.